ext_178588 ([identity profile] sairobi.livejournal.com) wrote in [personal profile] moonsheen 2003-11-24 06:30 am (UTC)

I've never seen succinct look so sexy. O__O

It's like painting: I've always been impressed with people who can render so much with an economy of assured brush strokes. In less than a thousand words, you've managed to cram in three very observant characterizations (Jiraiya, you poor cad) along with the tiniest of details (corroded hitae-ate, jagged terrain) that render the whole with a immediacy you just don't see in fanfic.

Plus, there's actually a oddly sympathetic note to Orochimaru's dialogue that makes me uncomfortable because I want to hate him, oh, how I WANT to hate him.

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