you know - i know nothing of the original context - but this, this was actually quite beautiful - very nicely written, and wonderfully detailed

the only part i had any sort of hitch on was when you say that "Ovelia was this" or "Ovelia was that" - that part could use some retouching - but it's beautiful thank you :)

(ps - mind if i add you to my f-list? - i very much enjoy reading your writing)